Interesting story here.
I like your use of the panels,thats probaly the most eye catching element of your work that has caught my eye.
People would obviously say the Art/Story,but its always important to understand how your character and scenes are going to move within the the peace you want them to.
Though I somtimes find the Art work abit buissy ie maybe a slight overalaberate use of details and textured areas,its also eye catching to ( I think page 6 is just about right in the balance you need in creating bold,sharp work but not overly fussy in compicating the panels).
The scroll idea adds to the whole movement of the scene and idea to which you have created the work,though maybe it would have been better had it been hand drawn rather than looking very Photoshop-y.
But overal the character work is very good,you have captured the expression of the female figure really well.
I look foward to its development.4D.

Furman and Nancy,

Nice comic. Really cool. Hope to see more of your work in the future.

Nancy and furman,
I love the ink work as I said before. Congrats on a nice comic and I'll have an eye out for any future entries from you. Best of luck in 2009.
Adam

I thought this was an awesome story, I'm just begging for more!

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This is my favorite this month. Beautiful artwork and writing. I am sucker for top-notch pen and ink. You have my vote!

Gorgeous artwork! Dig the mythological setting, too. I'm not 100% on the captions--clever idea,but they sort of stand out from the rest of the art. But that's a quibble--great entry.

Thanks folks and special thanks to RKB who always takes a lot of time on everyone. As far as my ranking RKB it is very hard to promote yourself in Cambridge every other person seems to have published a book or is a well known artist. I am the norm in this area not the exception so to get even a few votes is tough. I have talked everyone who has walked into my door this month to vote as well as all the people who live in my 'art commune' house but that has only added up to a dozen votes maybe. I just do not have time for anything else because I am so busy doing art. Did post flyers but no real response. I think it is very tough for a b+w fantasy to go anywhere...

Dang, I really thought I posted here already. Anyhow- very nice melding of art and text. The B&W is top notch and the story flowed smoothly for me. I didn't even realize I hit page 8 until it was too late ;)

I liked Alone okay, it didn't really grab me, art was cool, but the text drove me mad. A single soul gets a fav from me and 5/5 stars. Not only is the art here even more impressive, but for the most part I thought the text boxes were handled well enough, and the mythology story is new to Zuda and really grabbed my interest. I'm not even going to gripe about the lack of color, because the black and white here really gives it a classical/ really really old book illustration look to it, which I really enjoyed. I think most B&W comics on Zuda would look better in color, but their are exceptions and a single soul is one of them.
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SCREEN 1 You and everyone else by now knows I hate text boxes, but with the way you set the story up here you pretty much had to use them. The image of Pan and the sisters was really stunning, and the text along with it wasn't too much, and did a damn fine job of letting you know what this story was going to be about. You did more with screen 1 than some Zuda comics have done in 8 screens and a synopsis. As an aside, your synopsis was very well written too by the way. Very impressive across the board great job Furman and Nancy. Font was easy to read, good call there.
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SCREEN 2 I got worried with all the text on this screen, you pushed the edge but didn't go over my limit. I thought this screen actually did a lot to move the story along, and the images were fairly interesting.
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SCREEN 3 No text, a silent screen good call, sound effects would have been nice, but not really needed. After the text heaviness of screen 2 this was a nice break and change of pace. I also thought you did the sequential art of the woman being formed very well. It really does remind me of the best 80's B&W comics as far as art goes.
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SCREEN 4 Fantastic art, I love the layout of this screen. Question time: Why the text of with her final choked breath... it would have been nice to see a sfx: cough sound effect here, to go alone with the text. Even better you could have not had any text at all and just including some cough/gasping sound effects. If you would have just made this a silent screen and let the reader infer the first breath thing I would have liked it better than the text. This panel reminded me most of your last submission, if you can show it, why tell it??? In this context: 'and with her...' read more like novel prose than a modern day comic book caption.
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SCREEN 5 Okay lots of text here, with very little impact on me the reader. If you would have shown flash backs images of her life to go along with the narrative it would have went better, instead it's a low intensity pin up shot.
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SCREEN 6 Yes the character is talking!!! Her words seem pretty disjointed which makes sense seeing as how she just got formed, good insight into what must be her confused character. Good art here too.
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SCREEN 7 Damn!!! Very impressive art here, and screen layout. I liked the skull looking cave she goes into, and your take on Pan is very impressive.
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SCREEN 8 In panel 1 she already walked into the cave so is she walking into the cave again, or walking into another chamber or what?
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It would have had more impact as a ending if you could of had the introduction between her (she needs a name:)), and Pan happen on the 8th screen, stopping with the fight left the story feeling really cut off. I did really enjoy the fight scene, nice action element here, it was really missing from your last comic.
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Over the moon thrilled to see you back Furman with such a impressive comic. You should be ranked higher than you are.

The art is breath-taking. I'm reminded of Mark Schultz ("Xenozoic Tales"). The story is truly ambitious and larger than life. Excellent job! I do agree with kingofsnakes about the color, though... it looks great in B&W, but you don't have to stick exclusively to black and white. Think of the things Miller did with Sin City. Occasional color can have a great impact.

I really like the ink work. Not sure I like the dialogue boxes, but still a really solid entry. I wish you the best of luck. :)

Nancy and furman,
story shows much promise, art reminds me of old masters like Rembrandt...wow ! I could stare on every panel for hours. Good luck!

Wow! This is beautifully inked. Reminds me of D&D back in the eighties... Fantastic opening page, couldn't have done a better page. I keep trying to find something hidden in your work, almost as if you put something in there and wanted to know if anybody would notice, however, when you start looking too close, then I question what happened on page 2 around the trunk of the tree? Is it from a light source? And of coarse there is page 6, which is good but not the same detail as all the others. Still, absolutely wonderful work. I'm a sucker for fantasy stuff, love drawings of monsters and the unknown. Good luck this month!

Ptimony, love your work, maybe next year u and I should brainstorm and see where it goes...
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Nice work, your use of value and composition are quite good. Good luck.

Hey Furman, I must admit, I enjoyed your painted comic more, but this is also very good! It's nice to see some realistic female figures, and you're so generous with them too! I favorited you.

Cool style. Good luck!

If you like great Art, (& who doesn't?), & Mythology, (which I do), plus add a little old school sex appeal, = More Great work. (Like the scrolls, too)

Thanks all! I always try to do something very different from the time before which is why I went w/ the b+w. Please view at full page size to really enjoy the details :)

Your art is still extremely good. I'm glad to see you've cleaned up your text. I don't know how well the black and white works. Some colors (which you're clearly talented with) to go along with these excellent inks would've really made this a strong contender. The biggest weakness is in the writing. It's a little vauge. If the whole story was in front of me that wouldn't be a problem, but with an eight page introduction then one page a week thereafter it would be better to have something a little more straight-forward. Lighter on the subtext and more of getting right into the plot. Thats really the biggest criticizm I have, that I don't think this story is appropriate for this type of medium. Other than that it's a really solid entry. Maybe I'll see it in print one day!

Furman, your art still astonishes me! The story you have here is by far one of the more intriguing I've seen on Zuda. The narrative was fantastically immersive.

Very cool art. Reminds me a little of Totleben. For some reason page 6 looks less detailed and more rushed than the other pages though, which kinda breaks the spell a bit.

welcome back furman. love the pen and ink!

Welcome back, Furman!