Splitting Atoms
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Robert Atom was a gifted man who could construct whatever he imagined. This ability helped him set up the most successful technology enterprise on earth. But he realized that his children were not like him and doubted their ability to handle the business in future. Also the fact that evil minds constantly misused his creations bothered him.
So he created a clone of his late wife with enhanced strength, agility as well as his inventiveness and an accelerated aging process by which she quickly outgrew her older siblings. He called her Grace.
When Robert Atom passed away he left his entire estate in her hands knowing that she would take care of everything. This lead to a lot of animosity between Grace and her siblings, but she loved them and took care of them as best she could.
In this story Grace finally gets fed up of being the responsible one after her sister Erin writes a controversial book about their father. A distress call on an isolated and young science facility located on a habitable asteroid draws her attention. She investigates with her team and realizes that the personnel on the asteroid have shed all responsibility and returned to nature. Soon Grace and her troops are affected the same way.
Unfortunately the euphoric effect is due to hormones secreted by the asteroid's indigenous butterflies. This makes all animal life there docile; easy to pick off by the space faring predators that come there once a year to feast!
This really was an amazing comic, I absolutely loved the main character! I'm also excited to hear that you are working on something else. I know you'll make it with something, and I'm very happy that you're trying again. Can't wait to see it!
Hopefully you'll get elected to run in a "back-issue" month's competition. You have a great story here.
hellos. Thanks to everyone who supported and voted for me. I appreciate it! :D And all the kind words too. I love the feedback I got from you guys and it helped me a lot over this last one month. Currently I'm working on new project with a writer. You can check out the character sheets out here http://great-skot.deviantart.com/
Or you can subscribe or follow my blog at http://siddharth-kotian.blogspot.com/ for updates on upcoming work.
Once again. Thank you Zuda comics and all my new friends! :D
Really nice submission! The artwork is GREAT!
I'm not so sure the story really clicks for me. There are many elements I like about the story, such as Grace's father creating her using his own DNA and the DNA of his dead wife to make the child he wanted but did not conceive naturally.
I was able to retain my suspension of belief all through the beginning right up to the point where Grace is shown lifting many times her own body weight as a child. The super-strength kind of killed it for me. Had she been super-intelligent with slightly enhanced strength I would probably have been able to maintain my suspension of disbelief and retained more interest.
I like the idea of her siblings being jealous of her and the gossip book written by Erin.
All in all a very good submission. Please keep up the good work despite my comments. You can't please everyone.
Handsdown, the best
As much as I love the powerhouse team involved with The Hammer, I think this is probably the best entry this month. The art and layout is professional, and it's a really solid super hero story. A couple of small gripes: You're "bitchslap" sound effect looks sloppy compared to everything else, you should have used something digital, and it's hard to say "it's supposed to look sloppier" when you don't have any other sound effects to compare it to. Secondly the story really drags at the beginning, my first impression was not good. If you'd moved the background information to after the action scene I'd've already been interested enough in the storyline that I wouldn't have noticed the dependence on flashback narration to get out a ton of background info. These are really small gripes, but I think they would've improved it. It's an otherwise stellar comic, and like I said, the best this month.
Congratulations, I love your comic :) Great History and I think that your 8 pages looks like a 24 pages.
Hum... This took me a while to read, but finally who knows ? I tend to like comics who are long to read !
Now it's a question of interest: if the text is really required, why not, but if it's for avoiding some hard drawing, nope !
And yeah, Maybe you were so talkative to explain a maximum and give interest in those 8 pages ?
8pages are short, and that's right it's not that easy to capture the reader so quickly.
anyway, good luck !
P.S"bitchslap" stuff was great XD
Your job is one of my favorites, you have already five stars and my vote.GOOD LUCK.
true a lil wordy but theres a freakin talkin, water drinkin, mind of itz own water jug plus it walks so yeah it has my vote
It was a lil wordy but not so much so that I wasn't entertained.
hey man, i liked it and all but there were so much captions and dialog, it was probably better to make it a novel than a comic.
Heh heh. Stop stop it won't work! Bitchslap is an aesthetic sound byte not a practical one ;) Dont'cha wish life came with sound bytes tho...and intro music...sigh...real world is such a drag sometimes :P
B!%@#SLAP!!!(Me, hitting myself to hear the sound effect!)
To Freaquentcontributor: I’m glad you like the art! :) As a creator my comics are really a gift to people out there. And as long as someone takes away something good from it I feel that it’s worth the effort I put into it.
Hmm... lots of good here, but just as much bad.
Good first: Nice art and coloring, a pretty interesting origin, and the water cooler robot standing around himself and talking was brilliant!
Now the bad: Almost everything in this book is derivative of something else, which you appear to make no effort to hide, and some of the plot elements make no sense. While the origin flashback ended up being pretty cool, it was a pretty laggy and boring read with all the text boxes and static images. If you could have worked it into the current action, it might have worked better for me. The main character's costume looks like a stolen Barry Kitson design, sky satellite is Batman's Brother Eye from the OMAC comics, the origin is really just Tom Strong's with siblings, and the entire robot fight scene is lifted directly from The Incredibles...
Also, all the "Techno Threat" and "Science Whore" talk is really grating. It looks like the series is having a hard time deciding if it wants to be a fun sci-pop romp or a dark family drama... And I hate that you've established that the main character is such a genius, but then all you give her to do is run around in spandex fucking up stuff in stupid ways. As I said before, we already have Tom Strong, Anna Mercury, and the Fantastic Four being the world's smartest idiots. I'm not sure we need another. I'm more interested in the kids who AREN'T super-fit geniuses. At least they probably don't act like air-headed elitists...
Liz, this stalking is getting really creepy.
Dear Zuda Competitors/Creators,
I’m the creator of the Zuda fan blog, and I would love to interview all of this month’s creators. If you would be willing to answer 5-10 questions, to be posted on the Zudafan blog, please contact me at: zudafan@gmail.com.
Feel free to check out the blog: zudafan.blogspot.com
Thanks!
~Liz
http://leftyfilmsblog.blogspot.com/2009/02/zudafebruary-2009.html
Mini-reviews are up.
I'm currently working on a new project. Well several new projects. And since all of you have been so helpful and supportive with your feedback it'd be great to get your reactions on the new stuff. I'll be updating my blog soon so check it out from time to time and let me know what you think :)
Blog http://siddharth-kotian.blogspot.com/
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To Vekesh: Thanks, bro ;) I shall try.
To zaothedog: Thank you :) I’m not giving up. I just have verrrryyy little time to reach out to people and work on this new project that I’m collaborating on with a writer friend. Besides if marketing is all that Zuda comics competition is based on its kinda flawed as a concept; potentially spawning comics without any merit other than the creator's friend list. Nah, my comic is exactly where it should be, based on the quality of the finished product. I made some new friends and got some good feedback on my work which makes it worth it :) Now I have a better idea on how to repackage Splitting Atoms. And about my strength and weaknesses as a creator.
From personal experience as a casual Zuda comic member I know one part of Zuda competition that is flawed for certain. They give away the ranks early on in the competition right? And I have in the past always just checked out the first 3 comics because it’s initially in the top three thus logically the best of the lot. I know, I suck!! :( But that’s how it is. Also the viewer takes some time to load and if I have to wait for that well…blah, blah. Point is I think the ranks oughta be given out only towards the end so people like me (and u bet there are plenty of them) aren’t prejudiced (read as lazy) about the comics we check out.
It would be good to win but it would be more interesting to re do this thing.
…I wonder if I can re-pitch the same concept.
Hey - what is up with giving up with more than half the month still to go? Your art is great and you can tell a story. That seems like a winner. Like someone said, "wratch-it up the marketing and you can still win."
You can stil win. Power up your marketing stratergy.
To Vekesh: Thank you so much! :) Although since I’m stuck in 4th place winning would not really be possibility.
To Albatros: Glad you liked it. Yea, tons of stuff in store for future. I spent a lot of time developing the world of Splitting Atoms so if it doesn’t happen here it will definitely happen somewhere else :)
To CausleyConcepts: Thank you.
To Doctor Zen: Thanks dude!
Best strip I've seen on Zuda! The artwork is thoroughlly professional, and I like the mix of Silver Age sentiment and modern twists ... heroes who do right because it's right, not all fatalistic, obsessed and vengeful. Can't wait to see what Erin's up to, though ...
Loved the setup for this. Nice work!
i waited a long time to get around to this one, and i must say it's really awesome! it'd almost be a crime to not see this continue, there's such a rich story already set up from just these 8 screens! tons of possibility with unexplained stuff about the siblings and whatnot. also, great art! this was overall quite nice.
clearly one of the most well rendered submission sent to Zuda so far. This is a favorite for me. Definately in my top three this month. Well done on SplittingAtoms, skotian. Your work is very impressive and you are an artist with no formal training. I hope you win. Take care and good luck.
Also I updated my blog with one new art piece check it out here http://siddharth-kotian.blogspot.com/
Thanks, James :)
I'm not a huge fan of superhero-type stories so after the opening pages I got disappointed, but the artwork is awesome. That's just my personal plot preference though. Otherwise there's a lot of potential, professional ability and artistic talent here.
Hey, thanks citizentim :)
Still have to review a few more before I cast my vote-- but this one has been Fav'ed!
I looked through your blog,Skotian-- great stuff...There's a hint of Travis Cherest to your work (in my opinion)-- which is hardly a bad thing!
Also my blog http://siddharth-kotian.blogspot.com/
For those interested in seeing my other art works please visit my deviant art site http://thedying.deviantart.com/
:)
err, ok. Thanks, man for the fave! :)
Pretty good stuff. I love the art, especially the tech stuff. Your writing was pretty good to. Only a couple of places seemed forced in the dialouge. I really like your choices in "camera" angles. Very professional looking color and panel breakdowns. 4/5 stars and a fav. But alas my vote lies elsewhere.
GO FULLSCREEN! YAY! its just better that way :D
To infernalbbq: ;) Thanks!
To ranjanahp@yahoo.com: I see another new user, no? I didn’t know anyone read Devi but thank you :) I’ll actually shamelessly plug my first graphic novel Eat the Dead out here :P You’re grandson should love that too I believe. Oh wait. No, it has nudity. Hmm. Maybe he WILL love it ;)
To famished: :P lol.
To Argent. Thank you. Collaborating? Maybe in the future. Right now I’m just working on improving my art :D
Great art, personally kinda iffy on the story, though you got some good panels that just pop out. If you don't get the top slot, by all means grab a collaborator and try again.
I was at full screen! Lol, a 17" monitor can be unforgiving.
Action, Science Fictions. My grand child love your script. They die to see ur next release and even me. I feel young Devi too is amazing charater. My grandson is a fan of Devi. He finds her amazing with those outlook. All the best for your next issue waiting to read more...
Haha, brilliant! My faith in you grows in leaps and bounds bro. ;) I'm eager to see how this month's comp goes...
For those just arriving. GO FULLSCREEN! :D its just better that way! :D
Thanks infernalbbq :) I think ya figured out what the accusation in that book written by Erin was pertaining to :P
Check me out, spending too much time on here and replying to comments about my comment. :)
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To Caanan: (the original version, not the caanan01 upgrade)
With regard to my mention of the lengthy exposition, it wasn't so much that it wasn't interesting, rather that because of it's length Siddharth had even fewer pages to kick off the story and get us to connect with Grace as a 3D character. I definately agree with you that the sister's tell-all book is a great cliff-hanger as is, I'm interested to see how it pans out. :)
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To Skotian: nice work bro, I'm sure this is gonna be an exciting month for ya. Enjoy! Oh, and I just noticed in the synopsis that Grace is actually a clone of her father's late wife! It's a pity he's actually dead, that'd be a particularly creepy twist to the story fer sure. Oh, and I wonder what Grace's mental development is like, considering she was an 8 yr-old in an 18 yr-old's body. The more I ponder this the more dysfunctional the elements become and the more interesting it gets! :D
Thank you caanan01 :)You rock!
Very Pro. I luv it
GO FULLSCREEN! yay! It's better that way! :D
To Keri: Thank you so much! :D
To famished: lol. Thanks for the fav famished. Sorry about the small font size hurting your eyes. As I keep saying though GO FULLSCREEN! :D Honestly its better that way!
To Pixmaker: Thank you! :D
To infernalbbq: Thank you so much for the good wishes! :D Yep font is too small but the whole package looks much better in fullscreen :D Caanan got me spot on. The last panel is where the actual story erupts. The first part was just to show how tough and cool under pressure Grace is…so we can watch her crumble later on! Muwahahaha! And I’m a comic fan first and foremost I just wanted to get the backstory out of the way so we can get on with it :P
To Caanan: Thank you :D Yep you got it right. Set up the hero to be infallible just to make them fall. And of course get back up..eventually :P…or not!!!! Man, I hope I get to complete this story. Grace has weaknesses as we’ll see, umm, hopefully, and more trouble than one person possibly deserves in a lifetime…:( And yes the genetic engineering is a big part of it. Did anyone catch the accelerated ageing bit? :P
Everyone loves a sufferin’ superhero :D
To ashishavin: Thanks dude! :D